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Huge breakthrough

Post by Stevenloan » Tue Apr 26, 2011 4:58 pm

- Yesterday John got promoted to financial manager. He considered it as the first huge breakthrough in his career.

- Are these good enough to say?

Thanks a million!

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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Bobinwales » Tue Apr 26, 2011 5:17 pm

Yes.

But it would work just as well without the "as".
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Edwin F Ashworth » Tue Apr 26, 2011 10:33 pm

'- Yesterday John was promoted to financial manager' sounds stylistically better to a Brit, Steven.

'He considered it as the first huge breakthrough in his career' doesn't sound right to me - perhaps it's the implied presumptiveness (I'm going to have many huge breakthroughs).
'He considers it to be the first major breakthrough in his career' conveys a greater degree of humility, and the present tense corresponds to a recent, ongoing change of position. If the step up really is massive, 'It is the first huge breakthrough in his career' will suffice - obviously, 'he' is well aware of its importance.
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Erik_Kowal » Tue Apr 26, 2011 11:04 pm

Amplifying Edwin's anti-narcissist objections, I think 'first breakthrough' is perfectly adequate.
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by marie26 » Wed Apr 27, 2011 1:51 am

I'm wondering why it would be considered narcissistic to expect breakthoughs in one's job?
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Erik_Kowal » Wed Apr 27, 2011 3:13 am

It wouldn't. But being promoted to a financial manager position is a perfectly normal, ordinary event that hardly merits being described as a huge career breakthrough unless you have incorporated some stunning whoppers into your résumé/CV.
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Wizard of Oz » Wed Apr 27, 2011 4:47 am

.. or Erik you are 16 yo and you have just graduated from Harvard Business School and this job isn't in Daddy's business ..

WoZ who inherited a job in a coalmine
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Erik_Kowal » Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:11 am

Yes... Living in Newcastle, that would have been the least you could have expected to inherit. Especially at Christmas.
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Re: Huge breakthrough

Post by Wizard of Oz » Thu Apr 28, 2011 11:44 am

.. but Erik it was a high class coal mine .. and we still have very up-market coal mines in the Hunter ..

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